Unit 4 Peer Group Review- Darien Allen

You really seem to know how to get the readers’ attention at the beginning of your blogs. You did this is several different ways, not just one. One example is in “Centralized Government: the good, the bad or the ugly?” you get the reader interested by relating it to them. You do this by saying “if you search the internet” this is something  that  everyone who reads your blog could do and could get a better understanding to what you’re saying. Another thing that I liked about your blogs was your were able to get your personal beliefs and thoughts into the blog and add to it without dominating the entire blog wi.  An example of this in your blog “He Said, She Said, They said what?”. In this blog you explained the differences between men and women communicating and you were able to put a little bit of your experience into it, without taking away from the rest of the blog.

I would suggest making sure your citing correctly. It could get confusing sometimes whether it was your idea or someone else’s. An example of this is your blog “Popular Music”, its hard for me to tell whether or not these are your own ideas or you got these ideas or you’re got these from someone else. You do cite well in “Monogamy, Infidelity and Present Society”. I would use that as a reference if you need too.

The first blog that I thought was one of your “greatest hits” was “Cars… or Weapons of Not-so-Mass Destruction?” I thought the persuasiveness of this blog was amazing. You’re trying to get people to be to do less of what most think of as a right instead of a privilege. I think it worked because you didn’t demand for a complete stoppage. Also you had a personal experience that would make people think twice. Another blog of yours that I felt was a “greatest hit” was “Materialism: A Meaning Response”, I picked this one for your analysis of what Twitchell wrote. When I read his article I couldn’t take it seriously, but you were able to analysis what his was saying and put it into evening clearer terms. Another one I felt was a “greatest hit” was “Monogamy, Infidelity and Present Society” because throughout the blog I thought you did a very job in combining both arguments from the readings, and your opinion on the possibility of what the readings suggested.