Week 11 Blog Reviews

Tasha Cerimeli- I was very intrigued by your blog from the 28^th. I liked how you focused on religion as one of the biggest contributions the Irish have made to our country. I think people forget a lot of what our country was built on including our economic policy was religion. The sequence of your paragraphs was very good. I thought this because when you ended each paragraph it seemed as though the sentence was giving a preview of what would be in the next paragraph, the best example is the transition between your second and third paragraph.  Although I liked the idea of how you explained religion and  its influence, I thought maybe should have given a little more on the Irish’s influence on economics, as it seemed like that’s what the reading and the question focused on.

Your blog from the 26^th was also well written.  Your argue your point very well. The way you compared and contrasted was very interesting. I thought you did a good job when you explained Twitchell idea’s and then you would state your opinion and point out what you didn’t agree with. I also liked you were able to incorporate your own personal experiences with materialism. I think giving examples like that really gives the reader a better feel, as I think a lot of the time the reader can relate with examples.

Justin Vizcaino- Something I liked from your blog from the 28^th, is how clarified what those who consider themselves to be Puerto Rican consider themselves to be Latino, because I myself was unaware of what they considered themselves. Something I thought it very interesting and something that people forget about, is that Puerto Ricans in America send a lot of their money back to Puerto Rico, making the number of American dollars circulating in United States get smaller. I was a little confused about your inclusion about the parade in New York City. You seemed to concentrate on their influence on the economy before and after your mention the parade, it just didn’t seem to go together.

In your blog from the 28^th you made some really good arguments to prove your side.  I thought maybe instead of just quoting the book, actually putting their arguments in your own words. When a quote is a sentence is by itself it often disrupts the flow of the the rest of the writing.