Justin Vizcaino- I thought your blog from November 4th was very well written. It seemed to me that you know what you where talking about, and know more than just what was in the article. Especially when you would take quotes from the reading and follow it by giving your explanation to what it means or what effect it has had. I thought you were able to transition from each paragraph very well especially the transition between the second and third paragraph. I would be careful in your citations though. I say this because, I was curious to what insider training was, I was looking for the quote you used, I could not find it on page 453. In you blog from the 2nd, I thought it was interesting and impressive how you explained that libertarian government was intended to work by its founders, but it can’t with our current system of government. You also transitioned from paragraph to paragraph very well, I liked how the sentence wasn’t exactly the same as the next paragraph, but it seemed to be similar.
Tarah- I liked in your blog “How Much is Too Much?” that you started off with a question and then answered it.I think it did two things it gained the readers interest and it explained what it was, as then they reader wouldn’t be lost, no matter what. While I think some explanation is good, I think maybe you did a little too much as the whole second paragraph is an explanation of what Sameer Parekh does. In your blog “Finances !“ I thought the way you summarized and explained what Finance was, was very well written. I thought it was interesting how you explained how they carved their niche, and it was by figuring out equations to fit something that is very difficult to understand. The only thing that I can point out is you were kind of inconsistent with your citations. It’s not a big deal as we don’t usually cite from the book unless it quotes, it was just kind of weird to see a citation at the end of the one paragraph and nowhere else.
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